Wow, that's lovely. Seriously. Loads better than my first (and only) attempt at a sonnet was. It makes me want to take this class... (well, maybe with a different professor).
I wish I had suggestions for a title, but alas, I do not. I would, however, venture to suggest switching about the /only/ & /existed/ in line 14, if you wanted.
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Date: 2007-09-06 07:35 pm (UTC)I wish I had suggestions for a title, but alas, I do not. I would, however, venture to suggest switching about the /only/ & /existed/ in line 14, if you wanted.